Hi Class,
Today I want to work on developing an outline. This is related to clustering that we did last week. We will also be using this outline for developing specific writing assignment #4.
So today I want you to first pick another NEW topic on p. 93 of our textbooks and begin prewriting with clustering. This should take you about 10 or 15 minutes. Then use those clusters to make an outline and organize your thoughts (see example on page 93). This will be your first draft for specific writing assignment number four.
I want you to post your outlines on our web blog and work on the specific writing in MSWord to be sent to me sometime before December 30, 2008. It should be 1 paragraph with about 12-15 sentences. Remember to use as much description as possible.
Mr O.
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The Beach at Sunset
The beech at sunset gives you the feeling of loneliness.
a. Ocean waves
・gentle
・soft sound
b. Birds in the sky
・a flight of crows
・cawing
c. The Sun
・very big
・falling down in a ocean
・Giving the color of orange to everything(faces, sands, sky)
At beach, the color orange and the sounds you can hear matches very well to make you feel sad.
My workplace
Working at the Mihama 7plex movie theater is glamourous.
A.Atmosphere
・American style movie theater
・smell of popcorns and hotdogs
・Special day (Christmas and Halloween)
B.Staff
・considerate
・Have a sense of responsibility for their job
・Enjoying their job
The movie theater has a lot of other attractions for customers beside watching movies.
The Beach at Sunset
The beach at sunset gives you the feeling of loneliness.
a. Ocean waves
・gentle
・soft sound
b. Birds in the sky
・a flight of crows
・sounds of cawing
c. The Sun
・very big
・falling down in a ocean
・Giving the color of orange to everything(faces, sands, sky)
At the beach, the color orange and the sounds you can hear matches very well to make you feel sad.
My Workplace
My workplace is a Japanese food bar.
A.Place
・Awase, Okinawa city
B.Customers
・older men
・families
C.Condition
・stinky
・noisy
・smoky
・oily
F.Employees
・Kindly
・Funny
I do not like working at my workplace, but I like talking with my colleagues.
A holiday parade
I experienced a large-scale, bustling and gorgeous holiday parade in Australia this summer vacation.
A. Parade
● colorful and traditional costumes
● a lot of sightseer from foreign countries
B. Street stalls
● rare and delicious foods from foreign countries
● Vietnamese spicy curry and rice
C. Fireworks
● huge, beautiful and fascinating fireworks
● much more fireworks than I expected
● cheering and clapping
The parade with a lot of street stalls and huge fireworks really impressed me and will remain in my mind.
The Subway at Rush Hour
Many people use train at similar time, and the rush hour happen.
A. Time
7 to 8 in the morning and evening
Finish or go time school and work
B. People
Go to school
Go to work
They are packed.
C. Dangerous
Choke
Stifle
Molester
Pickpocket
Catch the finger or body in the closing door
D. Remedy
Change the time to start working
Some people go to work or school early
The rush hour is going to happen as long as people change the time to go school or work.
A Beach at Sunset
A beach at sunset is good place to come for couples, for groups, and even by yourself.
A. With your partner or person in your heart
1. A chance to get closer
a. The scenery
b. The sound
c. The smell
d. Feeling a little cold
B. With a group
1. For party
a. Swimming
b. Barbeque
c. Fireworks
d. Other activity
C. By yourself
1. For relaxation
2. For thinking
3. For refreshing
The ocean is open to everyone. Just take your jacket and pedal.
My Workplace
Even the job is hard, I love my workplace.
A. Location and Interior of the shop
・In the Naha Main Place
・Color of the shop(pink and red)
B. Job specification
・Hard labor
・The Christmas season
C. Goods
・Main character of our shop
・Goods with strawberry pattern
D. Colleague
・Friendly
I love my job because of good colleague and pretty goods.
Manami
A Crowded Bus on a hot day
A crowded bus on a hot day may be so uncomfortable for everyone.
A. a bus in summer
・heat and humidly
・have no effect on an air conditioner
・rush hour congestion
B. people in the bus
・students and worker
・at rush hour
・sweat and smell
Bus in rush hour is so bad, so you should get on the bus early to avoid the rush hour.
A crowded bus on a hot day
Everyone becomes disgusted with a crowded bus, even more on a hot day.
A. High density
●No empty seat
●Keep standing for long time
●Hard to get on and off the bus
B. High temperature
●Muggy
●Sweat
C. Passengers
●Touched each other all the time
●Someone’s breathing
As soon as get on the bus, you must want to get off because of those bad conditions
A Crowded Bus on a Hot Day
I would often go to school by bus.
It was so crowded and sticky on a hot day.
a.Adhesion
・I could not move my arm and chest.
・I could look into others hair whirl
b.Atmosphere
・Warm
・I cannot breath smoothly
・heavy atmosphere
・my glass was clouded by hot air
A bus which I would often used was so crowded.
And it made me nervous.
A beach at sunset
I think always sunset makes our body and soul cool.
A. Nice view
・calm color(orange, dark blue, white)
・Stars start to show up.
・the sun reflects surface of sea.
B. Romantic
・contrast of color attract many couples.
・chance to kiss and propose.
C. Good feeling
・sounds of waves.
・comfortable wind.
・cool sand
・
We can see some good view and feel good atmosphere at sunset. Therefore sunset has a power to relax us.
The town square on market day
In Lebanon, most exciting market, “Hajjah night-market”
Food/shops
a. Coffee beans shops, which have any kinds of coffee beans from all over the world, serve freshly ground coffee
b. Arabian bread shops, which always serve fresh-baked bread
c. Sweets shops, which have traditional Arabian sweets, dried dates
d. Food courts, not only Arabian food but the other countries foods, Japanese, Chinese, Korean, Turkey, Western, African.
e. Fast food shops in the middle of the market, Tony’s, McDonald’s, Sub way, pizza hut, KFC and starbucks coffee shop.
f. Fruit & Veges shops, so fresh, cheep and delicious
Ayumi
A Beach at Sunset
The beauty of the beach at sunset gives me not only calm but also sad feelings.
A. The sky
・orange
・sun
・sunset clouds
・Japanese gull
B. The sea
・sound of waving
・reflection of sun
・sands
C. The atmosphere
・silent
・romantic
・sorrowful
Because the evening is short in a day, the scene of the beautiful beach at sunset gives you a special feeling.
Remi Matsubara
A beach at sunset
On fair day’s evening, there are some people spending time on the beach.
A. people
・some couple
・playing children on the edge of the surf
・people doing barbecue party(smells good)
B. sky
・turning red to purple
・setting sun
・some stars
C. sea
・sea breeze(cool)
・calm
We can relax, and calm down on the beach at sunset on fair day because calm sea and sky make people be comfortable.
Asayo Gima
Yuka Miyagi
071926K
A beach at sunset
Even on a warm day, a beach at sunset in Okinawa is so beautiful.
A. Scenery
・sea’s color
・the horizon
B. Feeling
・cool wind
・relax
C. Spot
・Tropical beach
・Sunset beach
・Beach in the northern part
I often think that I am lucky because I can see a beautiful sea when I want.
The student cafeteria at lunch time
We have such a great cafeteria on our campus.
A.feelings
Fidgetiness
Noisy
Restless
B.full of people
No seat
No table
Long line
C.meal
Good taste
Cheep
If you want to enjoy lunch at our cafeteria, you need to choose time.
Nina Arakaki
My Classroom
A. Inside a classroom (advantages)
5 classrooms for each floor
gray tables and chairs
tables and chairs are lined up in 4 rows
tables and chairs have casters (suitable for group discussion)
a blackboard
white/blue colored chalks
huge windows (can see glamorous sky, lush green trees, and a parking area)
B. disadvantages
no clock (improve students' time management skills but it is inconvenient)
no dustbin inside a classroom (garbage, messy classroom)
no umbrella stand inside a classroom (students forget their umbrellas)
only 4 dustbins and 2 umbrella stands for each floor
C. Suggestion
should have a clock, dustbin, umbrella stand inside a classroom
My Workplace
My workplace, cram school, is so comfortable.
A.Cats
・Gentle
・Talking to people
・Cleanliness
B.Conditions
・Comfortable
・Smell smoke
・Air purifiers
C.Teachers
・Having trust
・Affection for the students
Teachers who work with care and affection make us including cats comfortable at the school
My work place
a) Environment
- Clean
- Sports facilities
- Cafeteria
- Parking space
b) Salary
- Good pay
- Incentives
c) Benefits
- Paternity leave
- Good colleagues
- Chances to get promotion
A workplace has to be clean and
it has to have facilities for their employees.
My apartment after a big party
My room after a big party is always really terrible.
A.Furniture
・moved
・messy
・left something I have never seen…a things left behind
B.Foods
・many leftover foods on the table
・sink full of dirty dishes
C.Garbage
・overflow a trash box
・garbage throughout my room
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